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Six Sentence Story -the Wakefield Doctrine- [a Sybil Trainor Six]

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This is the Wakefield Doctrine’s contribution to the Six Sentence Story bloghop.

Denise is the host.

Following is the next installment in the (serialized) ‘backstory’ of the newest character from the Six Sentence Café & Bistro oeuvre, Sybil Trainor.

This week’s prompt word is:

VISA

“Hope everything was to your liking,” the waitress raised her eyebrows but stared down at the card reader on the glass counter at the door of ‘Stillwells Eat ‘n Go Luncheonette’; pulling the card from the front-left pocket of her jeans, Sybil hovered the Visa like a latter-day Holy Spirit until it bestowed $9.78 worth of blessings.

Her decision to drive to Radcliffe by way of state and secondary roads only, came to her as the sign ‘Leaving Yates Center (pop. 1372)’ disappeared in the rearview mirror; now, walking along Main Street of Edwardsville IL, the smile that ushered in her decision, chased up behind her like a childhood friend; looking to her left across the Sunday-quiet street at the plate glass shop windows, her smile sharpened into a grin at the white dress and Sunday-to-Church-hat her reflection wore.

Diagonally across from where she had lunch was the Town Square, which for all of no longer being in Kansas, was as familiar as her right forearm; all forty-five degree angles and dry decorative fountains, as if the founders, quite in thrall of the civic DNA from ‘Back East’ were simply too exhausted to do more than pay lip service to a world left behind.

A voice, echoing quietly off the storefronts, drew her attention to a large black man standing at the back of an even larger, but also black, SUV; it’s tailgate open, a small array of loudspeakers aimed at the curious,

“My brethren of the cloth love Revelation 17:1-18:24, more intent, sad to say, on causing fear in those who must bear under the Great Tribulations that approach,” the man stood on a small area rug, held a cordless microphone in his left hand and wore a 21st century version of a Nehru jacket.

“While it is true the Rapture will take up the Saved, our Lord is merciful and those of us remaining will be given a second chance,” like the thin branches of a dowsing rod, the man’s eyes rose above the small crowd and locked on Sybil’s;

“We are invited to stand with Him against the army of the Beast, ’cause God loves you and the things you fear make you unworthy, are the very things that gives it power”.

Sybil stared back at the preacher as he began to sing and wondered, with a smile, that maybe she hadn’t given religion enough credit for bringing something into the world that might help with the endless hunger that grew in a part of herself she allowed no one to see.

 

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Well, what exactly do you want to know? Whether I am a clark or a scott or roger? If you have to ask, then you need to keep reading the Posts for two reasons: a)to get a clear enough understanding to be able to make the determination of which type I am and 2) to realize that by definition I am all three.* *which is true for you as well, all three...but mostly one

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  1. Frank Hubeny says:

    Interesting point: “the things you fear make you unworthy, are the very things that gives it power”. I reread Revelation 17 and 18 about the harlot and the fall of Babylon. I wonder what happens next to Sybil and this street preacher.

    • clarkscottroger clarkscottroger says:

      yeah… I am actually trying to write a villainess and, while Fred* was a fun diversion, I hope we will see more of Sybil’s dark side as she takes her time getting to Cambridge MA

      *Fred Hammond we love his combination Motown/gospel music

  2. Spira says:

    Interesting molding.

    • clarkscottroger clarkscottroger says:

      …am I being down-graded from sculptor?!! lol

      Hope I did not offend anyone with my religious advice*

      That said, if the next step is ‘modeling’ then I’m all for it… I related a childhood adventure that involved model cars, airplane glue and an admittedly over-active imagination when I commented over that Dora’s Six this morning.

      PS Where the hell is your Six?!

      * no religions were harmed in the writing of this Six, all insights into the Bible, ecclesiastical and otherwise, are the product of the author’s admittedly profane mind… ‘ceptin for Fred (music vid) anyone who doesn’t totally love the guys music is lacking…something lol

  3. “Sybil hovered the Visa like a latter-day Holy Spirit until it bestowed $9.78 worth of blessings.” – that was a fun line to read, and good forshadowing for the encounter involving religion later.

    • clarkscottroger clarkscottroger says:

      Thank you, Nicole!

      I was this close to thinking, ‘Hey is this foreshadowing?’ (But I didn’t want to jinx myself) Full Disclosure… the phrase while arriving well after the majority of the story was established, I was very much in the mood for religious referencing…)

  4. messymimi says:

    Excellent episode.

  5. dorahak says:

    Her darkness is coming through, Clark, almost a Damien-like feel, and you’re rolling it out so expertly as to build up a portentous, cinematic reveal. A riveting read.

    • clarkscottroger clarkscottroger says:

      Thanks, dora
      Tougher than I realized to write a bad ‘bad guy’… for whatever reason in other stories, where I need a villain, inevitably I find something redeeming in them, they become likeable. Sybil should not be likeable, pitiable, maybe, but not likeable.

  6. Chris Hall says:

    Interesting…

  7. Phyllis says:

    Very engaging, thank you.

  8. Halleluja, you’ve given Sybil something to think about!

  9. Your Sybil is coming into her own. Intriguing final paragraph.
    (Psst… um, Clark? Which hand do you use to count off six sentences?)

    • clarkscottroger clarkscottroger says:

      Damnit D! I’m a writer not a mathematician! (lol)

      you’re correct! that last quote should’ve been semi-colonated (against excessive Sixation!)

      Too late to correct… maybe a Five Sentence Six, next week?
      thanks (on the Sybil compliment)

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