Welcome to the Wakefield Doctrine (the theory of clarks, scotts and rogers)
This is the Doctrine’s contribution to jenne and ceayr‘s photo/image prompt bloghop, the Unicorn Challenge.
Take the image (a new one each week) throw it into the lightless void of that portion of your mind connected to the creative …whatever and typetty-type!
oh yeah, slight constraint: Max 250 words.
Jophiel’s sword cast the ragged couple’s shadow into the harsh, new world.
She was dressed in shame, he walked ahead of her, jaw set resentfully, towards the inhospitable land to the East.
Presently, the two came upon a thoroughly alien landscape. The ground was level, softly green, and studded with upright stone slabs.
“Sucks to be you, right?”
The voice, friendly with self-confidence, just enough archness to make ignoring it unlikely, belonged to a dark-haired woman.
The pause became a silence which grew uncomfortable. From the edge of the cemetery, the woman stepped forward, laughing, “Where are his manners?” After hugging the woman and scowling at the man, continued,
“I”m Lilith, his ex, you must be Eve.”
“Yeah, I get it, bleak, scary graveyard as an introduction to life outside Paradise. Your Creator may be All-Powerful but subtle He ain’t.”
“Come on Eve,” Adam interrupted, “We don’t have to listen to this… God said you would be devoted to me, so just accept the fact that we’re doomed to a life of toil, get old and die.”
More laughter from the dark woman.
“Here’s the thing. Your Creator, and your Tempter? Both dicks. Small minds and resentful spirits. This?” Lilith’s voice leaning towards Eve, “Childish attempt to scare you when it’s actually the true Promise. Those stones have names on them, The names of mothers and fathers, sisters and brothers. You, Eve, will be the Mother and they will follow and, in fact, become your eternal life.”
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Intriguing – and fun – take on the best-seller from days of yore.
Lilith is a fascinating character, who I’ve used myself in tales (once in a SSS), and you have imbued her with humour to match her independence of spirit. Or Spirit.
I especially liked ‘Both dicks. Small minds and resentful spirits.’
ty, CE
what’s not to like about a character in the best seller of all time being ‘allowed’ to get free of the author(s)?
from what I’ve read (and choose to believe) is the Lilith story was there (two separate ‘God made made’ versions) that she didn’t want to be subservient to Adam, flipped off the Creator and walked out of the Garden. Somehow, they didn’t ‘re-write’ the OT after deleting that version. They just added info, to the effect that ‘oh, that Lilith person? shes a demon, preys on children and… is ugly!’
damn! good job standing up for the Patriarchy, guys
I have no difficulty imagining those were exactly Adam’s words, lol.
Adam created first? Surely, a cosmic joke gone awry.
Engaging and entertaining Sunday morning read.
that’s correct I believe there’s one version that holds that ‘God made Adam. Adam made all the animals and fowls in the world.’ (actually in the regular OT, I believe Adam was assigned the job of naming all the animals and fowls truth and fiction yo
I can see why Lilith wasn’t a success as Adam’s wife – too feisty by far!
What kind of wimp says, in the Glasgow vernacular, ‘It wisnae me, it wis her!’
Anyway, good story – I really enjoy it when you have a go at biblical characters and stories.
Let’s say there’s a deity and let’s say he’s read your story.
‘Dude!’, he’d say, ‘That Clark! Damn! No, not ‘damn HIM’! Just ‘Damn’ as a sign of appreciation. Finally somebody who says what he thinks. And you know, that’s a real cool take on eternal life.’
That’s assuming a deity.
What I think? – Excellent story, well plotted, clear and to the point, thought-provoking…
I like it.
thankee, Miz jenne
‘I’m Lilith, his ex, you must be Eve’ – what a great greeting!
A thoroughly enjoyable piece.
thanks, Keith
Hey, what’s going on? I wrote a long and vaguely irreverent comment, pressed ‘comment’ and ‘submitting’ turned and turned…and then the comment disappeared into the ether. Hm. I’ll never reproduce the original – but maybe that’s what the ether wants, censoring me?!
Was it this:
I can see why Lilith wasn’t a success as Adam’s wife – too feisty by far!
What kind of wimp says, in the Glasgow vernacular, ‘It wisnae me, it wis her!’
Anyway, good story – I really enjoy it when you have a go at biblical characters and stories.
Let’s say there’s a deity and let’s say he’s read your story.
‘Dude!’, he’d say, ‘That Clark! Damn! No, not ‘damn HIM’! Just ‘Damn’ as a sign of appreciation. Finally somebody who says what he thinks. And you know, that’s a real cool take on eternal life.’
That’s assuming a deity.
What I think? – Excellent story, well plotted, clear and to the point, thought-provoking…
showing on my end
I like it.
Yep, that’s it – I’ve got it now too.
I bow to technology!
Glad you like the comment.
Tell Jenne it could be worse, she could have a wordpress account and still get marked as spam when commenting in wordpress blogs with said account.
Interesting take on the prompt.
thank you M. (yeah, I’ve heard that sometimes the two (Blogger and WP) do not play nicely together. Thanks for persevering.
That was very delightful – poor Adam, always not treated as well as he wants to be.
Thank you.