Welcome to the Wakefield Doctrine (the theory of clarks, scotts and rogers)
Denise is the hostinae and the rules are simplest: a story (based-upon/employing/using/referring-to/making-one-think-of) the prompt word.
Prompt word:
FOCUS
“I need you to focus on my voice,” the words were cheek-close yet as distant as childhood’s summer. The man felt nothing except the light, blossoming downwards, like dryer-warm bedsheets billowing over a laughing child.
There were other other voices, submissive yet with a contrapuntal strength, pawns in advance of an intricate chess offense.
“We’re losing him.” The voice, jagged from the strain, seemed to resist the embrace of the horizonless light, even as, like a figure in a steam-fogged mirror, it began to take on definition; the timbre of the chorus of responses and replies lost what little human warmth they possessed as the volume rose to a crescendo.
“Call it,” half supplication, half a final entreaty, two words softened into resignation as the light receded into an impossibly bright and distant point.
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Oh, that moment. Wonder what that light will be like, i don’t think it will be hard to focus on it then.
totally agree
Great idea to use that point of view to tell the story. Well done.
(And I love Bach!)
thank you
half the fun (with certain Sixes) is find appropriate music… in this case I got to spend an hour or so listening to two and three part inventions until I found the one that justified the use of the word ‘contrapuntal’
The picture, story, and music all tie together very nicely.
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Focus as vision and as concentration. Good one Clark. Bach will do too!
yeah Bach do have a way with the neat and tidy notes, non?
Oh my goodness…what a stunning portrayal of something so emotionally tense, yet serene.
Thank you, Lisa
blossoming downwards, like dryer-warm bedsheets billowing over a laughing child. Love that line!
yeah… (a reach in terms of literal context)… but the imagery it evoked was just so enjoyable.
Yeah, the Bach piece was perfect with this 6.
Really enjoyed the descriptives.
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Excellent conceptual write about the experience of dying. I can only hope you are right in the portrayal of comfort it offers. Excellent six, Clark.
An exceptional Six! Love that second sentence and the concluding one too. Thanks for introducing me to “contrapuntal” which fits Bach’s works perfectly.
Thank you, Pat