Welcome to the Wakefield Doctrine (the theory of clarks, scotts and rogers)
This is the Doctrine’s contribution to the Six Sentence Story bloghop.
Hosted by Denise, constrained by a sentence limit (high and low) of six, there are worse ways to spend the remaining time you have on earth.
Prompt word:
RELAY
“Any word from our gumshoe?”
It has been suggested by some in the arcane field of Ontological Linguistics that the first language was not developed by Man, rather it’s origin was among the apex predators just before humankind rushed the stage like a primordial Kanyé and wrestled the mike from the lions and the crocodiles.
Lacking only a pith helmet, (plentiful in the strippers’ prop room), a whip, (way plentiful) and a wooden chair, (the classics never disappear completely), Diane Tierney, hostess and de facto business manager for the strip club half of Lou Caesare’s establishment, leaned across the booth,
“Nothing since he left yesterday, a gap in time Olympic relay racers would disregard; however, if you want, I’ll reach out to his admin, Hazel, see if our detective has set up an update schedule.”
“Good thinking, Diane, that broad’s got her shit together, don’t know why she stays with Devereaux, at least not after I made her an offer…” the owner of the Bottom of the Sea Strip Club and Lounge laughed his crocodile laugh through a cloud of cigar smoke. Allowing himself to be captured by his manager’s raised eyebrow response, waved his hand to disperse the smoke, “Pardon my French.”
They both laughed; the stripper on stage, Rita Spring, heard them and missed the next-to-last clump of crabgrass of her costume and, in a desperation move, went right to her hardscape finish.
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Hazel would do well to stay clear of that pair. Clever way to splice in atmosphere in that 2nd sentence.
thank you.
Hazel has interacted with Lou and Diane at a previous point in a Six (she was trying to find a missing boss) I suspect she can hold her own with most anybody
I suspect you’re right.
I like spending time with these characters.
I enjoyed the picture of the predatory tulip on the cover page .
Thank you
I can just see Rita Spring entering the cast of characters. I wonder what is going to happen to her now.
oh man! we’re top heavy with stripper and exotic dancers (bar rum bump!) as it is.
lol
Hazel could hold her own with them, but I wouldn’t recommend it, either. If the ship ever sinks, you go down with it, after all.
I suspecting most, if not all, characters here have a less-than-ideal grasp of the consequences of their actions
The talk was so interesting even the stripper had to listen in, reminds me of a time I was listening in and walked into a literal pole… I liked the first sentence a lot, language is a mystery even in reality.
Lou (half of the conversation) is one of my favorite characters and not, coincidentally, very easy to write. (I believe there is room for mgic in the space within us that accounts for writing fiction. Lou (and a couple of others) walked on to the page and all I did was type what was said… like from the beginning. very fortunate to have such a ‘real’ character
Always interesting to hear what’s going on in that excellent establishment.
this is very true!
Tense times at the club today, at least for Rita!
yeah, what with being a new(ish) dancer and all, shouldn’t have let herself be distracted like that