Welcome to the Wakefield Doctrine (the theory of clarks, scotts and rogers)
This is the Doctrine’s contribution to the Six Sentence Story bloghop.
Hosted by Denise, constrained by a sentence limit (high and low) of six, there are worse ways to spend the remaining time you have on earth.
Prompt word:
GROUND
“Ethan Ethan van Decken…you’ve been in an accident, can you hear me?”
Light and sound, wearing each other’s clothes, ran around the car-shaped wreckage in confused hysteria… somewhere nearby, blue suns went supernova in a rhythmic sequence that pressed through closed eyelids.
“Try not to move, son, you’ve been in an accident… was there anyone else in the car with you, Ethan …stay with us, help is on the way.”
“Jesus Christ, with all the kids dying for Nixon in Southeast Asia, you’d think being safe in college would convince them to be more careful; hey, Sarge, there’s a purse in the car, better check the woods… goddamn, another one over here.”
With the world turned on it’s side, the young man lay on impossibly soft asphalt and tried to focus, to recognize anything that went with driving a girl to a nightclub after mid-term finals; all that remained of his car and a girl was bathed in red by road flares stuck in the ground like demonic votive candles.
“Ethan, babe, wake-up, you were having a nightmare,”
Rosetta’s touch, along with the sheer intensity of her concern, banished any lingering hypnagogic graffiti of his nightmare leaving only a fragmented memory of the need to escape into time to save someone named Sherie.
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Wavy lines inserted and I am not adjusting any dials, lol
Now, I’m worried. Side effects of Ethan aka the Sophomore’s time travel?
Poor Ethan!
Good edge of your seat scene. I enjoyed “… all that remained of his car and a girl was bathed in red by road flares stuck in the ground like demonic votive candles.”
I am glad to hear that Rosetta is concerned. Sherie has entered the story and I wonder if Ethan might have gotten in some time machine after all.
hey! thanks for the observation I do intend to keep the Reader on the fence about the Sophomore’s chrono-wanderings (I was going for a combination flashback/present day Six
Gosh, that was a scary moment and more. It seems that something connected in the past and in the now. Hmm, interesting…
thanks, Chris (as I replied to Frank) I was trying for a Flashback Six (trickier than they should be!) at least for me lol
this is a brilliant line! – Light and sound, wearing each other’s clothes, ran around the car-shaped wreckage in confused hysteria…
Ooooo! The plot thickens!
thanks, V
Indeed the narrative congeals!
This has that eerie effect of dream/not dream. Sounds like either way he’s gotten a message. Thanks for the Buffalo Springfield! A good match for the story.
yeah, sometimes it takes a song to make a Six
It’s a tasty six on its own, the song is just icing.
So, Sherie is the new entrants? I wonder how you will shape her from the putty of words that you have held since time immemorial, and the talent that you display every week in building aspirational castles with it.