Welcome to the Wakefield Doctrine (the theory of clarks, scotts and rogers)
This is the Wakefield Doctrine’s contribution to the Six Sentence Story bloghop.
It is hosted by Denise.
The rule is six, (and only six), sentences per submitted story.
Hey, while at one time, in these pages, we would lead in to a serial story installment with a brief, “Previously on…”
That’s not gonna quite do it today. Frequent Readers are surely familiar with both the metaphoric location/narrative known as ‘the Six Sentence Café & Bistro’ and the current Ian Devereaux serial, ‘the Case of the Missing Fig Leaf’. Here, in this Six Sentence Story this week, we offer the next installment of the story that continues on from last week’s Six.
We make no secret of the fact that our participation in this bloghop each week is primarily to practice our writing skills, such as they are. This, necessarily, entails raising the bar on our-own-self. (Hint: the Six Sentence Story here should convey not only a shift in POV but, also one of the setting, in the sense of time frame. To make matters worse, i.e. raise the bar unrealistically, the second part of this Six is from a *WIP, ‘the Number You Have Reached’ which is a time travel story with an unfortunate insight into the reality of the past-we-remember and the past-that-was.
This week’s prompt word:
Film
The Sophomore, his attention commandeered by the tall, thin man stepping out of the hallway at the far end of the bar, singing,”…spark of the low-heeled boys.“.
Feeling something change, shift like an old 35mm film hopping from the sprockets of the reel for just enough frames to establish a different visual continuity, the young man stepped forward, extending his left hand even as there grew a sound that manifested as one part aural and two parts somatic; the familiarity of the momentarily quiet Café leached it’s color into greyscale, it’s detail into charcoal smudges and a vibration grew in intensity.
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“Hello?”
“Clark, it’s Molly, what the hell happened to you last night?”
The voice was familiar and the words made sense, unfortunately the calming effect of talking to a friend on the phone were nowhere to be found; even as the undifferentiated black filling the space around him grew in detail and shrank in size, he was seized by a feeling of fundamental incongruity.
“What do you mean?”
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I’m visualizing the Sophomore as he extends his hand, his world shifting…
“the familiarity of the momentarily quiet Café leached it’s color into greyscale, it’s detail into charcoal smudges…”
“Fundamental incongruity”. Just a little, huh? lol
Fiona’s a nice choice for a time travel Six.
Time travel paradox fading into the WIP story…yes! And the sentence Denise underlined…masterfully weaved!
ty GK
love it, especially the watch
I like how the tension building up to “fundamental incongruity” in the second to the last sentence was illustrated by the contrasting calmness of the final sentence.
yeah this one (this Six attempting to convey a certain effect (in the story) is devilishly tricky… for me at any rate. thanks for the read and feedback
Interesting piece, but I’m confused at your choice of vocalist for a John Lennon song.
valid point.
went back and listened to Lennon (and the Beatles) version of the song. Found a second version with less strings which I liked. But this is one of those examples of a cover challenging the original version. There are other more dramatic/contrasty examples of this phenomenon, first and foremost, Hendrix and Dylan or George Michael and Seether (Careless Whisper) or, back to the Beatles Tesla’s cover of I Got a Feeling.
Interesting, in listening to the both versions of Universe, I liked the (slightly) slower tempo of Fiona’s rendition
It’s all about perspective.
Ooh! Nicely done, Spare in worcount, but full in mood and pace!
I’m practicing the new word you taught me ‘tangential’. I had a dream, no, not MLK’s; it was of Fred Astaire dancing around the lobby of the hotel. When I joined my equally hungover friends the next morning they asked what kind of dance I was attempting in the lobby the night before.
(Tangential Commentarius) I love that puttin on the Ritz vid, used it in at least one WIP (though I will admit to loving a mashup../ wait (Subtangetial) vid!!)