Welcome to the Wakefield Doctrine (the theory of clarks, scotts and rogers)
Denise is the host. Each week, she provides a prompt word and invites all to write a story around said word. It’s fun and challenging. You really oughta try it.
Some explanation on this week’s story. It revolves around the lives of two new characters in my serial story, ‘the Case of the Missing Starr‘. Without giving too much away, the sub-Saharan country of Burundi figures prominently in the plot.
(One of the things I most enjoy about the process of writing is the need, (for me), to imagine life in parts of the world I will never visit. I spend an inordinate amount of time online trying to see what the people and their lives are like, through tools like google. Unfortunately, Burundi is a remarkably poor country and, as of yet, there are no ‘Google street-views’ available. But, if one perseveres, photos of life in the country can be found, mostly from institutions like the University of Burundi and the commercial sector.)
In any event, allow me to introduce Gabriel and Iniko Nisabwe.
This week’s prompt word:
SCRUB
A full day at the university, with half a night at the hospital still to go, Gabriel Nisabwe, intent upon resting his chin on his wife’s shoulder, got as far as the kitchen of the small single level home, when she turned with such natural grace that his day-old whiskers grazed the toffee-gold of her neck with less friction than velvet on a pearl; she smiled, “Professor Nisabwe, just in time to help set the table.”
A tired smile accentuated his dark walnut complexion as he asked, with feigned concern, “You’re the psychologist in the family, should I be worried about olfactory hallucinations, as the aroma of Boko Boko greeted me at the door and I know for a fact our anniversary is not for another two months and three days.”
“No, Gabriel, it is not a holiday or our anniversary, but still a special occasion.”
With a cautious silence, he took a single step back, still holding her hand and stared at her; Iniko saw an excitement beginning to flare deep in his eyes and quickly, with a smile, said, “No, Gabe not that, still we are preparing for the life of a family, when you are a physician and I have my doctorate.”
Holding her chair, as she put two plates of food on the small table, he smiled, “God willing, our children will have your beauty and practicality and my persistence,” seating himself across from her, he continued, “In less than a year I will trade my white shirt and bow tie for scrubs and a stethoscope.”
“Speaking of good news, I read in the newspaper the shortfall in the seed-stock due to the US withdrawing from participation in the UN’s agricultural assistance program has been solved; Bayer AG, the German multi-national has agreed to come to Burundi’s rescue,” Iniko Nisabwe smiled to herself, thinking that perhaps there was a bright future for her husband and her family yet-born.
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Lovely story, except…except there’s got to be a catch! lol.
Gabriel and Iniko sound like very likable people :)
Nicely told.
thank you, I do, also, like Gabriel and Iniko
I like the extent to which you can stretch six sentences. Commendable! A positive, happy tale!
One of the challenges (and pleasures) of this bloghop, to try and condense a little story or describe a young couple in six sentences.
Beautifully, you captured the relationship of two kind souls in this story to lead us to the possibility of more.
Thanks, Lisa. As I mentioned in my intro, this couple have a place in ‘the Case of the Missing Starr’ and, in fact, will be in the next chapter of the serial.
The words just popped into my head, may they live long and prosper.
hold that thought, as they will be seen in the next chapter over at ‘Missing Starr’
Good job with the relationship of these two. And I agree, the sentence structure is great. Good six.
thanks, man… (like I did everything to avoid lessons and homework, back when my brain was open to learning…lol)
Loved this. . .”his day-old whiskers grazed the toffee-gold of her neck with less friction than velvet on a pearl;”
I hope the next year is a good one and that they will have a bright future.
Thank you, Pat. They do seem like nice people.
Very nice, I also enjoyed the music.
catchy tuneage, indeed
I am in agreement with the earlier commenters. This is a likeable couple and may they live long and prosper.
Thanks, D I like them as well, the fun was the time it required to learn the proper pronunciation of boko boko
You are the master of this and I so very want to know more. Wow. I love them. I hope they have a long and amazing life. xoxoo
Hey Kristi! thanks for stopping in! In case you want something to read (lol…like none of us have too much of that!) here is the link to my serial ‘the Case of the Missing Starr’
I’ve been writing it as a serial (think Prairie Home companion with hit women, cigarettes and rich people…told by a clark) The advantage now is that you can get up to speed in one sitting and… on this week’s installment learn of the peril to our friends, the Nisabwes.
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