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Six Sentence Story -the Wakefield Doctrine-

February 21, 2019 By

Welcome to the Wakefield Doctrine (the theory of clarks, scotts and rogers)

This bloghop invites participants to write a story, six sentences in length with the week’s prompt words as… well, as the prompt word.

Hosted by Denise each Weduresday… its fun and good for those of us searching for proficiency. (Writing about writing proficiency is like fighting a war to establish peace. If you do it right you forget the goal.)

 

Prompt:

Perch.

 

 

Smoke and sound climbed the invisible vines of air to the man; the scent at once ancient and alien, the tolling bells deprived of all resonance and most tone, shouts under water drowning before being heard.

Looking down from his choir loft perch, the man became refocused as the slow procession of slumped shoulders and hand-to-face sobs moved with reluctant discipline towards and beneath him. Fragments of self came together and he acquired both a personal pronoun and a set of feelings, the first being fear, like the sight of a towering roller coaster while still in the parking lot.

The last person in the dark-suited line of mourners lagged behind, her face that of a woman locking the front door as the impatient car full of family waited in the driveway to begin a long anticipated vacation trip.

Urgency grew and the distance between the woman and the void of white, (unseen beneath him), shrank.

Darkness followed the smoke and the sound falling upwards, filling the vast space; a spark of self, pulled wooden-letter blocks together to form a last thought, “Don’t go, I can’t stay here alone.”

 

 

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Well, what exactly do you want to know? Whether I am a clark or a scott or roger? If you have to ask, then you need to keep reading the Posts for two reasons: a)to get a clear enough understanding to be able to make the determination of which type I am and 2) to realize that by definition I am all three.* *which is true for you as well, all three...but mostly one

Comments

  1. GirlieOnTheEdge says:
    February 21, 2019 at 8:11 am

    I’m speechless….
    Intense. Moving. Excellent.

  2. phyllis0711 says:
    February 21, 2019 at 8:18 am

    It took a few tries for my feeble brain to wrap around, but once understood, definitely worth reading.

  3. UP says:
    February 21, 2019 at 8:35 am

    “invisible vines of air” good line. good six.

  4. Violet Lentz says:
    February 21, 2019 at 9:40 am

    Being the one that was left behind, I know how common it must be for those who have moved on to hear those words.. Very expertly penned Clark.

    • clarkscottroger clarkscottroger says:
      February 21, 2019 at 1:54 pm

      Thank you, Miz V.

      (The music came totally on the heels of the core idea. Though I was not a huge fan in the day, this song, at that time, was enjoyed…. little did I appreciate what the future had in mind.)

  5. Lisa Tomey says:
    February 21, 2019 at 9:43 am

    I enjoyed this point of view of the subject and it pulled me in all the way. Lovely 6.

    • clarkscottroger clarkscottroger says:
      February 21, 2019 at 2:03 pm

      Thanks Lisa.
      It was an interesting process technically more than creatively. The image of looking down on a funeral was the seed. Deciding on POV was not as simple.

  6. messymimi's meanderings says:
    February 21, 2019 at 10:48 am

    Oh, i don’t know what to say, it is overwhelming.

  7. D. Avery @shiftnshake says:
    February 22, 2019 at 11:46 pm

    Such a scene you paint; very visual. I also liked how the sound was as if underwater. There you go again!