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This is zoe’s weekly bloghop, the Six Sentence Story. Each week she provides a prompt word and invites one and all to write a story that is six, (and only six), sentences in length. It’s truly a worthy challenge (and) a worthwhile effort. Come and join us!
This week the word is: ‘Question’
“Sorry, sister, didn’t see you there there, the habit kinda blends in with the dark couch and all, try an smile from time to time, so I’ll know that you’re awake,” Det Glen Trahmani grinned his laughter to assure the nun that he was not being too disrespectful.
Sister Catherine sat quietly and watched, as the detective moved about the room. “I have the utmost respect for those in your profession, I promise not to interrupt your questioning,” her wire-rimmed glasses threw shards of light as she continued, with a smile that barely moved her lips but pushed one eyebrow quite high, “perhaps you’d like to know my whereabouts at the time of Mr. Avila’s death?”
Naturally competitive, excessively confident, Glen Trahmani possessed a highly developed talent for picking his battles, held up both hands and said, “Ya got me, sister! ‘Sapientiae Timor Domini Initial.'”
Seeing the distress in the face of Roanne Avila, once a student in her sixth grade class, Sister Catherine said, “Your detective here is showing off for me, and just said, in passable Latin, ‘The fear of the lord is the beginning of wisdom’.
The homicide detective turned to the young woman and said, “I have just one question; can you think of anyone who would want to harm you or your husband?”
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The wife is always the first suspect!!
dude! you just suggested an angle/storyline that wasn’t there when I wrote the scene… thanks (I think lol)
Excellent scene set up, it pulled me right in to wanting to know more! I loved the banter between the detective and the nun, a little less formal than usual, and lightening the situation. Well done!
thanks… sorta a younger David Caruso (in the part of the Detective)
Love the image. Definitely have to catch up this… *adds another thing to the reading pile*
thanks (lol… I know that feeling, is Evelyn Woods still alive?)
How far are you in now? Do I have the link? Oy….
Actually the pace is slower than the previous books, and I’m getting more comfortable with that, so I’ve only written 3 Chapters (Chapter 1), the excerpt is from Chapter 4
Knowing the context from which these six sentences came, I’m anxious to continue reading. I greatly admire your writing skills.
yeah, me too. I’m working on the Chapters 4 and 5. (I’m having a debate with myself about length of Chapters. Almira averaged something like 3500 words. I’m thinking I want to keep them shorter in ‘Home and Heart’. Since I have about 3400 words, I’m thinking I’ll publish 4 and 5 this weekend.)
Strangely, I feel as if I’m waiting to hear about old friends again, yet I know I don’t know them all that well yet….looking forward to reading this book and getting caught up in the continuing adventures of Sister Margaret Ryan and her entourage :)
This Sister Catherines turning out to be interesting and the detective too.
Now i’m hooked, i hope it’s not the nun or the wife.
not wrecking it by saying, no, the nun has nothing to do with the murder and I’m pretty sure neither does his wife.
I knew someone who had the detective’s sense of humor. Great lead in to the question. I hope the nun’s former student isn’t somehow involved in the crime. Teachers wish the best for their students, yet know there will always be a few who end up in unfortunate circumstances some of their own volition. Good story.
thank you. I’m early in the story (‘Home and Heart’) and this excerpt is from the next Chapter due out this weekend. If you’d like to join us on the story, this is the link to the first chapter. I say, ‘join us on the story’ because, as valerie and denise are sort of alluding to, this is a serial story and, to make it more interesting, am writing as I go. Meaning that I don’t know what happens next. literally.
I really, really enjoyed this, Clark! Great writing, fine description–especially the eyeglasses throwing shards of light!! And the well-drawn characters left me wanting more of this story.