Welcome to the Wakefield Doctrine (the theory of clarks, scotts and rogers)
This is the Wakefield Doctrine’s contribution to the Six Sentence Story bloghop.
Hosted by Denise and defined by a single number: 6 (the exact number of sentences in qualified stories)
Previously on ‘a Café Six‘
Prompt Word:
RANK
“Lou?”
“Tall.”
The two men stood on equal, opposite sides of the round, lacquered-wood table; claiming a hemisphere being the most equitable of ranking, social or otherwise.
One, dressed in an exquisitely-tailored bespoke suit, raised an eyebrow, an ambassador of a smile that stood in the wings, the better to be fashionably late; the other, whose fashion choice was emblematic of a life in which lethality and personal comfort were of equal status, blew a grey-blue cloud of cigar smoke only to disrupt it’s fractal symmetry as he leaned out over the table’s equator.
A fraction of a second before the growing tension would have compelled an ordering of rank, the ice-maker, alone behind the bar reflecting neon votive candles of rows of liquor bottles, released it’s freshest, coldest cubes; it was a sound not unlike that of an antique steam locomotive’s first piston thrust tearing the machine from Newton’s grasp.
Both men acknowledged their amusement and sat down at the table.
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Enthusiastic applause for a delightfully visual scene* between 2 of my favorite characters.
(*’cuz I can picture it in a movie!)
Very nicely done.
And this:
“…whose fashion choice was emblematic of a life in which lethality and personal comfort were of equal status…”
thanks
Nice descriptions. I especially liked “neon votive candles of rows of liquor bottles”.
I also finally looked up “bespoke suit”, which I’ve heard before but had no clue what it was, thanks to your use of the phrase.
thanks, Frank… yeah I came upon that term when I was looking for vocabulary for clothing (not that I spend a lot of time describing my characters, but I don’t have a very extensive vocab… even worse for women’s clothing)
Nothing like a fresh load of ice to take the tension out of the air! Excellently descriptive six, Clark.
thank you, Violet
btwL thanks for the second Six. wait! lemme explain!
I appreciate the compliment on description (and I totally love the serial story) but then, this morning I thought, ‘Hey man, when did you last take a chance?
So I started with the reflection/reversed wording schtick which, naturally, lead to identity/gender switching… because, well, tricky business… anyway, you (and a few of the others here in Sixville) are constantly pushing the envelope so I decided to try the same, thanks!
Maybe now they can have a decent conversation.
And now you’ll speak… but who’ll be first though?
(great song, by the way)
ikr?
After I fixed the fridge a few weeks ago, it took nearly 12-hours for our ice maker to make that sound … and oh, what a delightful sound (like a child’s marbles spilling across a tile floor). Anyway, I just thought that icy bit rang true for me.
lol
thats the damn fun of this writing thing, no?
Love the simile for the sound, and the use of double negatives “not unlike” instead of like.
I find the award winning novels brilliantly descriptive, and you excel at the art. Get yourself nominated 😊
thank you very much, Reena