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Six Sentence Story -the Wakefield Doctrine-

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Six Sentence Story time!

zoe, she say, the word this week is ‘RIPPED’.

(Yes, we’re trying something that might be fun this week. The ‘we’ being me and ‘Girlie on the Edge‘. I will, in fact, be coy and leave it at that!)

RIPPED

Post offices, easily the most ubiquitous symbols of modern culture, manage to project an air of civic order in even the smallest of villages by the simple expedient of having a lobby; often merely a wide corridor between ‘outdoors and in’, it provides a place to stand and look into tiny windows on the doors of the mailboxes inset in the wall, a key to which is as much, (if not more), credential of citizenship as any wax embossed document.

A man, his worn suit a tapestry of the echoes a life’s potential and it’s inevitable disappointments, stepped back and held the door as Starr Diamond approached the inner lobby, the angle of his body sketching an archaic (and very unconscious) bow as he waited for her to pass. The young woman, wearing clothing that clearly would require access to the internet if desired by any the inhabitants of the small town, moved with the grace of youth past the man and, in a gesture that resonated within only the deepest most primitive parts of the brain, turned to face the man as she passed through the entrance.

Sliding the green Certified Mail form (Part A), ‘Margaret Ryan’ showing through the fingers of her right hand, along with the Certified Mail (Part 2), across the counter, Starr announced to the woman opposite her, “I’d like to send this letter, Certified Return Receipt, please.”

Edwina Fulton accepted the envelope without looking beyond the Piaget resting on the young woman’s wrist and, with movements as graceful and automatic as a pianist playing Mozart’s Piano Sonata No. 16 in C, removed the thin white strip from Part 2, placed in on the green form, ripped the lower half of the white form (Part 2), fed it to a machine that tasted then spit it back, red ink saliva a circle on the receipt.

Accepting Starr’s five dollar bill, she quickly made change and pushed it, along with the receipt to the young woman; inspired by the simple and sincere ‘Thank you’, Edwina Fulton wrestled her winter-roughed lips into a smile that, like a child’s first ‘A’, found in a box in an attic, wrinkled and smudged, nevertheless conveyed that feeling, from a long ago time in life when hearing a ‘Thank you’ made a woman feel good.

 

 

 

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Well, what exactly do you want to know? Whether I am a clark or a scott or roger? If you have to ask, then you need to keep reading the Posts for two reasons: a)to get a clear enough understanding to be able to make the determination of which type I am and 2) to realize that by definition I am all three.* *which is true for you as well, all three...but mostly one

Comments

  1. UP says:

    Thank you a still make people feel good

  2. phyllis says:

    I liked it and I went to Girlie on the Edge, but I may have gone to early – will try again later.

  3. This painted a picture so familiar to one who is old enough to remember formal manners and public pleasantries. Oddly, I always found, and still do, the classic old post offices to be such wonderful, intriguing places with their high counters and barred clerk windows, walls of tiny guilded boxes, and wallboards bearing Most Wanted posters. I think its sad that to hear please and thank you (and definitely not “no problem”) is now considered a rare treat.

  4. Thank you Clark for the link out.
    Nice bit of storytelling here and a little bit of a tease! What in the world is Starr writing to Margaret Ryan about? Hey! Does she know it’s “Sister Margaret Ryan” now? :D
    I marvel at your ability to build such giant sentences. Amazing!

  5. Talking star treatment this week!

    • clarkscottroger clarkscottroger says:

      lol (thats the trouble with our people, congenitally pre-disposed to messing with rules and conventional approaches to…anything “hey, clark! peas with a knife? sure it’s different but “)

  6. Pat B says:

    Some powerhouse writing for this SSS! Your writing made it very easy to imagine the movements of the characters. Comparing the gestures used by Edwina Fulton to a pianist playing Mozart’s piece is wonderful, or should I say classic. :-)