SSS -the Wakefield Doctrine-

Welcome to the Wakefield Doctrine (the theory of clarks, scotts and rogers)

 

This week’s prompt word?

SUBSTITUTE

is it? are we sure?

zoe eoz says it is, right there in her blog, the Six Sentence Story.

Substitute

He felt his mother’s voice ruffle his hair, “Remember, no one at this school knows you either, they’re probably just as shy.”

The eight-year-old boy, determined to be mistaken for the mailbox in front of his family’s new home at the far end of Circuit Ave, did not turn around; he avoided looking to his right towards the autumn-dark bend in the road, as the squeal of old bus brakes, like a million rat army, grew louder.

Remembering how his favorite detective, Ian Devereaux, dealt with the surprise client at the beginning of ‘the Mystery of the Missing Starr’, raised his right hand and shrugged his jacket closer to his neck; the wooden snapping of the old-fashioned spring closer at the top of the screen door told him he was in the clear…for now.

His stomach rumbled like a desperate herd of animals fleeing a forest fire as the metallic guttural roar of a diesel engine grew louder; without warning he felt a cold flash of fear chill his scalp.

Perfect,’ confident that no one would see through the disguise, he knew his substitute, ‘frightened-third-grade-boy’ cover would keep the nuns off-guard long enough to figure out what they were hiding under the habits and too-big sleeves. ‘We’ll just have to find out,’ the voice in his head had a tough as cigarettes and whisky edge; satisfied, he climbed the first step onto the busload of children.

 

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Well, what exactly do you want to know? Whether I am a clark or a scott or roger? If you have to ask, then you need to keep reading the Posts for two reasons: a)to get a clear enough understanding to be able to make the determination of which type I am and 2) to realize that by definition I am all three.* *which is true for you as well, all three...but mostly one

Comments

  1. UP says:

    The first line would have been enough! Great post

  2. I always get a little of the film noir, old movie vibe when you do these, Clark.
    Good stuff…
    “the squeal of old bus brakes, like a million rat army” – Eew. But very clear.
    “the wooden snapping of the old-fashioned spring closer at the top of the screen door told him he was in the clear…for now” – I remember that sound from my Grandparents’ house. Distinctive.
    “the voice in his head had a tough as cigarettes and whisky edge” – Awesome.
    I love the imagery this week.

    • clarkscottroger clarkscottroger says:

      the authors of the (better) pulp detective novels (Chandler, Hammett, Parker etc) are my total heroes. to create a world (and action and emotion) with such economy… ayiiee

      lol just went and looked up examples of what it is I’m referring to:

      It was a blonde. A blonde to make a bishop kick a hole in a stained glass window.” (Philip Marlowe/ Raymond Chandler)

      “I’m a brew and burger guy in a paté and Chardonnay world. I’m as health conscious as the next guy, as long as the next guy is sitting on a bar stool.” Jake Lassiter/ Paul Levine)

  3. Yeah, this is an especially good 6. Excellent description/imagery/feel.
    3 thumbs up!

  4. messymimi says:

    Yes, i can see him. He’s going to be a tough nut to crack, but a soft center for anyone who does.

  5. Deborah Lee says:

    I saw the picture and went, “Yay! Clark’s noir!!!” Excellent as always. “A million rat army…” Very nice. :-)

  6. sasha says:

    Loved the imagery – “mistaken for a mailbox” especially haha – Great 6!