Welcome to the Wakefield Doctrine (the theory of clarks, scotts and rogers)
If it’s Wednesday evening, then it’s time to stretch them rhetorical (some)-ceps or linguistic (whatever)-maximus and get ready to sneak up on the prompt word of the week. (OK I’ll spare you the Wild Kingdom parody).
zoe speaks and says, the word this week is ‘Given’. Write a story. Make it six sentences long. And have fun.
(I’ve commented in the past how the writing in this ‘hop is all kinds of good and that I get as much pleasure from trying to figure out how the others do what they do so well with their Six Sentence Stories. Especially the serial writers like Josie and Stella and Mimi, among others. So, I thought what the hell! Lets try to see if the semi-serial I implied a few months ago would hold up to another installment. Not being all that confident that today’s Six would hold up in terms of continuity, I put the links to the first two installments at the bottom of the post. Plus I needed to read them to get a sense of the story….lol.)
Given
The scent of girl and the growling of a dog pulled me out of my rum oblivion. Given the 90 proof paraffin sealing my eyes, it might have saved the day for all three of us, which would’ve resulted in two grateful survivors. I once heard on some show, an old guy saying, ‘Man’s most basic fears are falling and sudden motion’, then again, it was from a black and white TV on a shelf, surrounded by neon lights in a bar on a Thursday afternoon.
A girl and a dog were filling the space to my left, so I pushed upwards against the wall at my back, the bricks slippery with the morning dew and grease from the restaurant vent fan, unfortunately I under-estimated the strength remaining in my legs and over-balanced, on my way to upright. Reaching out instinctively (like the old guy in the bar said), for something to steady myself, my right ear was slapped by a surprised and really angry sounding voice, “Was sum Teufel!?”
My grip on tailored cloth tighten, as a flash of blonde-on-sexy and good-dog, brushed past me as I fell back under a pile of pissed off german.
About clarkscottroger
You always have something that catches me
always like to hear that about a Six
What an intriguing situation you’ve created here! I’m glad you are going to continue this story. I suspect this isn’t going to well with one surprised and very unhappy German!
I think I will, in part (there being no secret in my using the ‘hop as a way to make writing practice fun), I’m thinking that maybe the next installment, I should try a 2nd person POV….it should be fun, that being really difficult to pull off
I really like the way you’ve now tied Ch. 1 and 2 together and have brought in a new element. You are right that it is very difficult to do much with six sentences, even when I use wildly run-on ones to cover more ground. I am looking forward to the next episode of this tale, and wondering how she got messed up with the German guy to begin with.
same here! (wondering how Star got herself into this situation… I have no idea! but then, thats the fun of writing, no?)
Hopefully, he will not get a bad reaction from the German man. It could make him realize that is better to control his drinking, or at least have someone with him that can give support.
this guy does seem to have a bit of a problem with the drink, no?
You’ve captured one reason i don’t drink — i don’t hold liquor well, and he doesn’t seem to, either.
yeah… I mean, a black and white TV?!?! you know how long ago those were? though, now that you mention it* I don’t think this guy’s all that old. odd
*well, you kind of mentioned it, lol got me thinking about the character.
Oh my goodness–well done!
thank you…
PS–thanks for the mention!!
Well crafted, Clark.You really did set out to strengthen and stretch your writing muscles and did it this year…really well done!
ain’t it fun? (we both have seen some remarkable changes play out in this strange world, non?)
This girl needs to put herself in some better places. Maybe her brush past him is because she is rushing out the door. :-)
I think we need Star to sit for a minute without running out or being chased so we can get a better sense of her!
Poor guy seems a bit confused. Hopefully he can clear his head and figure things out.