Welcome to the Wakefield Doctrine (the theory of clarks, scotts and rogers)
It’s kinda late tonight, (Wednesday), to get my non-blank-page entry established, so that when I get up tomorrow, I won’t face an empty screen. I know that the word prompt this week is ‘Standard’ and so, I begin the process. I looked up (alternate) uses of the word ‘Standard’ and came across: “…standard, i.e. either a type of flag or an inflexible but mobile image,” this is a part of the definition of the ‘standard bearer’ and may, very well, be our starting point.
Not sure, but one thing I do know, I want to write a Six Sentence Story this week that is a little, less…. metaphysical, ya know?
The couple left the church, amid a downpour of un-cooked rice, waving over their shoulders at the well-wishers who would soon be celebrating with food and drink and music. Neither spoke as the limo pulled away from the curb, bound for their hotel suite, to usher in a life of two-made-one. She chattered incessantly, inanely and constantly, hearing her own words much as fish, swimming in schools, sense the change of position of the other fishes, she talked about the world that she felt changing, unable to accept that the change was within herself. He listened to her quietly, as he found, in her sounds and words, a distraction from his own internal dialogue, a quietly-shouted stream of drives and desires, forming conflicts and amplifying each new thought until the world seemed to become, a vast, silent and thoroughly judgmental audience.
They found their way to the bridal suite, each by following the other, each by distracting themselves, there remained only physical consummation, very much a standard with two bearers.
(yeah, I know, ‘nice try’ I can do without the sarcasm ….lol next week for sure!)
About clarkscottroger
Nicely done. You really “showed ” a scene entirely by describing internal feeling and thoughts… Not easy to do i think… One would think you were a roger or something…. Naw…frist
thank you (coming from you, that’s very appreciated) sorta
lol
FRIST! To say….Excellent!
sorry…. the electrical clock indicates z got here 1 minute before you hit publish
Whoah wait! When I opened the page, Ivy was not here! Honest!!
Damn.
Did I like it because I could identify with the clark in the scenario? Probably. Interesting take. I like the representation of differing personal realities. Nice lesson :)
yeah, but it wasn’t surprising-ending scary or with a funny punchline… wait, let me re-read it…. never mind
lol
No sarcasm, i think you’ve captured well what many people actually feel and how they think in that situation.
thank you M!
Oooooooh I like that you also went with flags, and I LOVE the idea of words spilled and mobile like a school of fish
:} (yes, I believe I have, in fact, attempted to use what used to be called an emoticon)
thanks
You are nothing if not progressive, sir!
I tried to think back 58 years to try and remember what our feelings were in the limo. I think we were both struck dumb in reaction to the ceremony that was so out of our control however we did come down to earth when we got to the hotel in Paris where we had our honeymoon.
58 years! two words: damn! (you’ve probably heard it all, already, but the changes in reality since that time… ayiieee!)
Ahhh..newly married and already listening to her quietly…
*snorks*
lol (don’t tell anyone, but I hadn’t thought of that inference!)
Clark, you sentimental old goat, you! I love this! I think it’s my favorite SSS of yours yet. Such a well-portrayed scene.
thank you, lisa
(*snork*, indeed!)
This story was loaded with reasons to smile… the personalities, the nervousness and anticipation, the interplay of roles. Such a huge transition from ceremony to fruition, and you covered that so well in just six sentences! I find myself wondering how this couple will fare in the long run.
thank you Josie… (one of the reasons I enjoy participating, it seems to be helping me develop my skills, especially the ‘show not tell’ aspect, which I find very challenging)